Original death notice:
“It is with great sadness that we announce the passing of John Smith, age 55, on February 12th, 2022. John was a beloved husband, father, and friend. He will be deeply missed by all who knew him. The funeral service will be held on February 18th at 10 AM at St. Peter’s Church. In lieu of flowers, donations can be made to the American Cancer Society in John’s memory.”
Rewritten death notice:
“With heavy hearts, we convey the heartbreaking news of the demise of John Smith, 55, on February 12th, 2022. John was cherished as a devoted spouse, father, and companion. His absence will be acutely felt by all who were fortunate enough to cross paths with him. A memorial ceremony to honor John’s life will take place on February 18th, commencing at 10 AM, within the serene walls of St. Peter’s Church. In remembrance of John, we kindly request considering contributions to the American Cancer Society in lieu of floral gestures.”